Dear Snow white. I have finished reading your book. I have some feedback to tell you about the apple and the creepy old lady?. Here are some questions.
Why did you eat the apple?. Why did you let the creepy old lady come in?. Why did you opened the door to the creepy old lady? since grumpy said to don’t open the door to strangers. Why did you listen to the creepy old lady?. Why did the prince kiss you. Why did you go and sleep in some stranger's house. Why did you go to the forest by yourself?
Here's some advise don't talk to strangers, don't eat what ever a stranger provides and be safe. That's all what I wanted to say, we wish you the best in all your life with your prince and remember what I said,goodbye now, I love you.
From: Dad
Hey Paea I like how you edited your work. I was wondering the same thing for the questions.
ReplyDeleteHey Paea I like how you edited your work. I was wondering the same thing for the questions.
ReplyDeleteHey Paea
ReplyDeleteI like how you self-assess your work.
Nice question you did to the book called snow white
Hey Paea,
ReplyDeleteWhat an awesome descriptive letter. Maybe you should use more wow words to better this piece of writing. But overall this was an amazing letter. I like the fairy tale and I see you have been doing work on this. Thanks for the great work.
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